The video was alright, but nothing special. My biggest problem is the music, how is christmas music scary? There are a lot more nitpicking issues (like the cfox306 clip was included without explanation, I thought it was your own video of the ghost until later) but these are really minor things. Bascically, just keep practicing with your video editor of choice (Sony Vegas I assume) and you will go far, just remember that it can take months of hard work to be able to make really good videos.

Thanks man, i will try.

First of all - text outlines. At some places, I couldn't read the description you provided, because the text was white and the background was white as well.

I am doing a video on the paranormal activity in the maintenance tunnels in GTA V. I will fix everything that i wronged in my first video.

What the others said. Also try not to fill the whole screen up with text.